Personally, I would like to spend my free time in reading books about my major, such as technology digests, computer newspaper... Because I want do to(删掉) a good job in my subjects. Fortunately, my dreams come true, meanwhile, I ve gained other things--I found（have founded） a solid basic knowledge about my major(加破折号)make me feel easy to contrive the electronic circuit which have to be done during our bachelor years. Thanks to those books!
东方教育点评：（1）切题。
（2）论证比较有力，表达思想清楚。
（3）文字通顺，连贯性较好，但有个别语言错误。
注： 文中划线部分为原文的一些明显语言错误，括号里的为修改建议，为保持原文面貌，对于结构没有做过多改动。
2003年6月考试四级作文题：An Eye-Witness Account of a Traffic Accident
假设你在某日某时某地目击一起车祸，就此写一份见证书。
见证书须包括以下几点：
1、车祸发生的时间及地点；
2、你所见到的车祸情况；
3、你对车祸原因的分析。
例1． （2分段）
At 9:00, Jan. 20, 2003, I eye-witness a traffic accident in Dongfang Street.
I see that a（an） old people is hitted (hit)by a car.
In my opinion, the rapid driver is the main reason, but the old people also has his error.
东方教育点评：（1）字数明显不够，尽管都点题了，但只有三句话。
（2）有语法错误。
例2．（5分段）
In my opinion, the driver of Benz auto should be blamed on(for) the traffic accident. It was his drunk driving that resulted in this accident.
It is not(no) doubt that the traffic accident is a high(hot) topic in the modern(modern) society, different people have different attitude (attitudes) to this.