是很好,不过你知道什么是幸福真正的含义吗?
PS：我记得你在一个五年级的同学<<钓鱼>>的那篇文章上说了句"差得要死",其实我觉得他虽然没有你写的好,但他还是尽了自己的力量去写的啊!要尊重他人的劳动.BY ASHLEY.

是很好,不过你知道什么是幸福真正的含义吗?
PS：我记得你在一个五年级的同学<<钓鱼>>的那篇文章上说了句"差得要死",其实我觉得他虽然没有你写的好,但他还是尽了自己的力量去写的啊!要尊重他人的劳动.BY ASHLEY.

不是游记,与分类不符合

格式有问题、错误太多，要修改重写。

一个一年级学生能写这么多已经不错了！
我四年级时，连１００字都些不满呢！

这根本不是小学生一年级写的！

It’s okay, not too much mistakes.

My name is He peidong .I am 14 year’s old.I have a good firmly(it should be family though).There are 3 people in my firmly(again).My father,mother and me.My father’s name’sBob.He like’s playing soccer.My mother’name’s Amy.She likes playing computer games.I like they very much.
too short.

请大家指出我的语法错误！　

给你打还行已经很不错了,你写的这叫什么呀,听也听不懂
(希望写成作文人家就看得懂啦!呵呵!加油!)
^_^

这篇文章正确的写法应该是这样的：
Last Sunday, Xiaoming wanted to play football with his friends, Xiaogang and Xiaoqiang. 　
While he was going out, his mother was washing clothes. He got to Xiaogang’s home and asked Xiaogang, ”Would you like to go to play football game with me?” But Xiaogang told him he didn’t have time .Because he wanted to wash socks. So Xiaoming get to Xiaoqiang’s home and he saw xiaoqiang washing clothes,too. 　
So he went back home and said sorry to his mother. After that,he help his mother did housework. His mother told him. He was a good boy .
总的来说，还是不错的，不过，建议你在英文作文里写英文名字．

看不懂..实在看不懂啊!建议用文字写!

这..这是作文吗？
额．．请认真写！

I found some mistakes about this article：
1.What does "hive" mean?
2."the dentist isn’t work"is not correct,you can write like that：
the dentist is not on duty/the dentist is not working
3."dentistry hospital"is not correct,you can write like that：
dental clinic
懂了吗?下次要再仔细检查一遍!
我期待评价你的下一篇作文!

写得很抒情
很美!
但是..
大概意思不怎么懂耶..
很深奥的一首诗啊!

啊,写得很好呢,加油啊!
我支持你!
继续努力啊!
呵呵!

这是一年级小学生写的文章吗?啊?

写得很好啊,你很有天赋呢,哈哈

好厉害的作文水平!好像书中的CHAPTER的形式!厉害厉害!佩服佩服!!!(有什么秘诀吗?有的话分享一下哦!嘻嘻!^^)

看不懂耶..