This composition is a little different from the title. The title is about our life,.And on your article,the second part of the composition is about your life .It’s very good.You will experienced and you will experience. In some sentences you can’t spell correctly. You can use one sentence to express a complete meaning but you used two sentences. I think it’s not necessary. Try your best to practice writing , I think you will get much progress soon!
This composition is a little different from the title. The title is about our life,.And on your article,the second part of the composition is about your life .It’s very good.You will experienced and you will experience. In some sentences you can’t spell correctly. You can use one sentence to express a complete meaning but you used two sentences. I think it’s not necessary. Try your best to practice writing , I think you will get much progress soon!