Great
wish your ideal come ture.
Forget what your friends said.
Run to your ideal.

in your title, the "away"of "I will away feel young"should be "always",right? I think you must translate your english title to Chinese at first.Then you will find how simple it is. Of course, the thoughts in it is good. And you have expressed your ideals clearly. But i think you can write it livenessly or picturesquenessly as Chinese title. Try it and you can. Hope you succeed.