还好啦，不错，小曦。
只是听了太多致辞，你这篇雷同较多，
不新鲜啦~~！
希望以后多多创新哦~~~~~~~~！

写得不错哦哦！

姐姐，好棒啊！！！呵呵，一般我们学校就是说：“我的演讲完毕，谢谢大家……”
呵呵，希望你能写出更好的文章！！！

写的挺好~呵呵
至于改嘛~~“天空是否晴朗，明媚，完全由我们今天的努力和付出来决定！”这一句话中“天空”应改为“明天的天空”，才与“今天的努力”相对应。 　

Dear Leaders, teachers, Dear students：
   Good!
   Am pleased to have the opportunity in this special day to speak on behalf of the third day of the students. Autumn of September, R scenery, happy summer holiday is over, we usher in a new school year, began a new learning experience. First of all, I represent the third day of the fellow students, their sister school, welcomed the new students to join the first day. Today you, it is in the integration of post-secondary raised the beginning of the sailing life. We would like to first day of each student from the first day of school on the continuing success and further. I believe： After your persistent efforts and struggle, it will certainly be able to have the final harvest and joy.
改英语

很光荣啊，有机会代表发言
我感觉（是我感觉）最后一句有点生硬
如果去掉我的演讲结束呢？我记得在我们学校的演讲上，好像没有这句话
在最后好象应该写上“学生代表：*** **年*月*日”
我发言时都是这样写的