梦昕锶(来自 220.177.1.*)于 2007-10-19 20:45:00
感觉写得还不错拉..有几个地方错了哦..西西~
I am twelve years oid.{应该是OLD.}
In our school,Huang Yanhong is one of my good friend.{这里friend貌似素要+S的..}
I love hergood friend and she loves me,too. {这句话素虾米意思额..?貌似有点不明白哈...}
寒梅迎春 于 2007-10-19 20:59:00回复如下:
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谢谢指导哦!
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