VAMPIRE13(来自 123.112.12.*)于 2007-7-22 17:28:00
我修改后重新写了一遍
Dear David：
Thanks for your last letter, in the letter you said that you wanted to go to my school. First you are welcome to go to my school. After you go out the train .Then you may take the No38 bus to “ZhongHua”street, in first corner , , go along “QingNian” street. turn right in first crossing, . walk until you see the school in your left. If you can’t see, you can look for a market named“Carrefour”, my school is the opposite from it . Now you know? By the way, have a good trip.
By for now.
Your friend
出现的问题〉
句子中的语序有时颠倒
用词的准确需要注意 You’d better 是带有威胁口气的
还有就是大小写，空格和标点符号的使用
快乐女孩GO 于 2007-7-23 10:46:00回复如下：
(奖给发言者 5 分)
谢谢你哦，这么仔细的为我修改，
我以后会注意这些缺点滴
