HAPPY77(来自 210.80.157.*)于 2007-5-18 14:20:00
全文就没心思给你改了。
『Sometimes I am be very quite but sometimes I am a little shy.』两个错误。第一个』I am be ver quite』。这一句不仅有语法错误还有quite是拼写错误。裂。第二个，不要说『but i am a little shy』，『quiet』和『shy』的关系应该用『and』连接。所以正确的应该是『Sometimes I can be very quiet and sometimes I am a little shy.』
『突然发觉这样改还要困难些。干脆就改全文』
I am a girl, a cute girl. I have two big 、brown eyes, and I have long straight black hair. Sometimes I can be very quite and sometimes I am a little shy. I don’t want many people to know me, because I want be mystic. Do you think the idea is childish? But I don’t mind. I was born in March, 1994. I like winter and fall, they are very beautiful! I have lots of sister, brother and friends here, I love them. And I like many good teachers here as well. My favorite subject is Chinese. I love our country so I love our language! I am good at Chinese, too. My favorite color is blue. What beautiful color it is!
I want to know many new friends. Welcome to the net!
冰雪女孩 于 2007-5-18 19:30:00回复如下：
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哇，好厉害的......谢谢嘎
