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(广西北海访客)(来自 180.142.68.*)于 2019-5-4 16:35:16   
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And in my memory, there are many successful things, every time after the success I will be happy, the most happy things to make rice cake success. New year arrived, my parents and I went home to visit Grandpa. The next day in my hometown is the day before the New year. On this day, I am going to make rice cakes with my father’s grandfather. After hearing this news, I am very happy. Just go to the rice mill with my father and Grandpa.-it’s making rice cakes. There were some people squatting on the flat ground in front of the rolling mill, who were busy making rice cakes. See me coming, said: "come, the guests of the city, eat rice cake dumplings, eat!" I ate sweet rice cake dumplings: "my family is also going to make rice cakes." I walked into the factory and flushed with heat. People are kneading hard powder, pieces of hard powder after kneading, become broken. So he poured the powder into the steamer, and put it on the pan in which the water was rolling. After a while, when the powder was ripe, it was poured into the pastry machine and knocked with a wooden stick. As a result, the small hole below the outflow of rice cakes. It’s my turn to do it. I spread out the table, took off my shoes and sat on the mat. After a while, the rice cake fell, I hurried to turn over the rice cake. Hey, it’s hot. Just finished this way, that’s the other side. I was so busy jumping around. At this time, a sister said: "the rice cake is cold, it is time to build a yard." So, I learned my sister’s style, the bottom four, put four more, a layer to fold up. Aah! It’s done! Oh! But it’s kind of like the pizza tower-it’s too oblique! However, the sense of success is still somewhat, because it is also a success. I hope I can also make rice cakes next New year, from the leaning Tower of Pisa to the Eiffel Tower in France. On the way home, Grandpa also said: "Rice cake year by year!"
(广西北海访客)(来自 180.142.68.*)于 2019-5-4 16:33:44   
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不错的呢,呕。。 。。
(广西北海访客)(来自 180.142.68.*)于 2019-5-4 16:33:03   
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CJAOK(来自 118.182.112.*)于 2010-8-8 21:23:00   
对《上帝是公平的(转载)》发表评论
抄的把
冰薇子(来自 123.8.189.*)于 2009-6-8 20:11:00   
对《我最尊敬的一个人》发表评论
有错字~~~
正在我物色你玩具的时侯,围再一团
“你”玩具?
下次注意哈
呵呵
写的不错哦
WANGSIYI06(来自 58.17.250.*)于 2009-2-22 16:45:00   
对《快乐的周末》发表评论
你写的真遭;
技术的降低 ;
自己来学习(来自 119.1.12.*)于 2008-9-6 22:42:00   
对《我最尊敬的一个人》发表评论
谦虚使人进步,骄傲使人落后
这是很多人都听过的话,
可是懂得他的人却很少,
作者要学会谦虚,
而作文也要谦虚,
写到卖泥人时,
可以写一些他的长相,
这样更能衬托出他平凡而伟大,
你见到他给外国退钱是可以写一写自己的心态,
总而言之,
这篇文章可以算中等,
只要加一些人物动作和心态,
就好了!!
FAMOUS001(来自 221.130.57.*)于 2008-1-10 20:54:00   
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恩%字数太少
LZH11315(来自 59.173.242.*)于 2007-12-31 13:04:00   
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很好!只得我欣赏!
徐琳(来自 222.248.69.*)于 2005-1-21 22:49:00   
对《上帝是公平的(转载)》发表评论
我认为上帝有点不太公平,嘻嘻!你写的虽然不是特别好,但是你的字数却很长哦,值得表扬,你应该是符琳吧!
蓝泽薄荷(来自 221.219.7.*)于 2004-12-23 19:20:00   
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第一个字就写错了!
姜丝(来自 211.159.74.*)于 2004-12-18 14:02:00   
对《七彩花》发表评论
2~写得写得很好!想象丰富,我很喜欢。题目新颖


姜丝(来自 211.159.74.*)于 2004-12-18 14:01:00   
对《七彩花》发表评论
写得写得很好!想象丰富,我很喜欢。题目新颖
姜丝(来自 211.159.77.*)于 2004-11-27 13:17:00   
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写得还可以,+22
姜丝(来自 211.159.77.*)于 2004-11-27 13:16:00   
对《秋天》发表评论
写的很好!!!还行!!!+2
〓寒水秋月〓(来自 222.135.53.*)于 2004-11-26 19:39:00   
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如果再加进去一些神态动作,那就更好!
小颖子(来自 221.224.140.*)于 2004-11-26 19:32:00   
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还行,不过好像少够细腻。/
QUZHEN(来自 211.159.74.*)于 2004-11-16 19:22:00   
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写得不错,你是符号吗????
冰梦儿(来自 219.133.4.*)于 2004-11-13 17:09:00   
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廖芸芸留言
冰梦儿(来自 219.133.4.*)于 2004-11-13 17:09:00   
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写得还可以,狐狸!


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